B3 has been sending me some good ones. Here's one (I'm behind, so I need to hunt for the others, sorry!):
"What those initial findings found is the temperatures on the mainstem is controlled by the dams."
Two comments: inanimates in action! And tense, of course.
1. Initial findings found something? A better start to the phrase might be, "The initial finding is the temperatures...."
2. And if the object is "temperatures" then we need "are controlled"
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